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If I Fall: Chapter 21a
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Previously
"So can you tell me why we’re out here?" Dana questioned cautiously, not wanting to sound bothered by it since any alone time with Alice was better than nothing.
"Because Dana. This needs to stop."
"What does?"
"This," she emphatically motioned between the two of them with her hand. "Whatever there is still be between us, it’s just making it impossible for me to be around you, okay? So, I’m sorry but I can’t possibly be your friend right now.
"But Al, please, just give it a chance. You can’t just kick me out of your life again."
"I have to Dana," she stated in a near whisper before dropping her head.
"No, you don’t," Dana inched closer, her eyes pleading with the writer’s. "Like I said, I realize I can’t keep putting you in those uncomfortable situations like I did before. I won’t let my feelings get in the way of our friendship again. I promise. I just…I don’t want to live without you."
"God Dana, don’t you get it?" Alice yelled exasperatingly.
"Apparently not," Dana shot back.
"I want you to put me in those situations! I want to be that close to you again. I want to run my hands through your hair and kiss you until you understand how much my body aches to be close to yours. I want to be able to forget how much being with you cost me in the first place," she bit her bottom lip as she reflected upon what she just said. "But I won’t do that to myself again, I can’t."
"Al…," the brunette began, unsure of what to say next.
"Please, Dana. Just…just leave me alone."
And Alice, with tears in her eyes, somehow managed to tear herself away from Dana’s somber stare and walked back into The Planet with her heart in her throat, leaving Dana alone and trying figure out how the best relationship she’d ever had had gone so terribly wrong.
Chapter 21
Dana grunted as she took another powerful swing, throwing her entire self into the shot and not really caring that the ball flew piercingly over the net and directly into Harrison’s stomach. He tried his best to leap out of the way before connecting with the sharp sting of the fuzzy green tennis ball, but his efforts were simply insufficient as it struck him squarely in the abdomen.
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Nice Cliffhanger, don’t wait too long to update! Bathrooms are Danish’s special place…Get it on Get it on
Okay you’ve gotta be kidding me with this “should I continue” crap. Seriously, if you don;t have them work it out and consummate the hell out of each other I’m gonna hunt you down. Not really but it sounded good in my head. You quit I quit, so there. Really though, I love this and I love the whole tension thing. You’re awesome so you better damn well continue!
Swissmiss24, of course I remember your story. As a matter of fact, I have been waiting for this update. A month ago, I mentioned you on ourchart.com/forums/fanfiction/”Danish Writers, Where Art Thou.” The story line is attractive with D pursuing A. You wrote a very determined D. For example, in this chapter, you wrote “And when Alice did get tired, Dana would be there, ready to try again.” And yes, the cat and mouse game, that is why Danish is intriguing. Back to this chapter having Harrison as D’s sounding board was fun. It reminded me of the 3 musketeers’ visiting B & T to solve the “soup chef” problem. I could picture D’s same expression in this conversation with Harrison. Oh, and about Alice exercising, only if the sun would rise from the west. A’s heart to heart talk with Harriet was great. At least it was a start for A to admit herself out loud her feelings for D. But stalking again, I am not sure I can handle a second round. I love a hot & dorky Dana. Cinderella & Prince Charming? Nice touch. OMG, what a fantastic cliffhanger ending. I don’t know how you can even consider not continuing this story. About a month ago, I started commenting on Danish stories. With this post, you gave me a chance to tell you how much joy I got reading your previous posts. MT put it the best and please listen to her. MT also writes so beautifully and we as readers could not afford to lose two major Danish writers who happen to be “La crème de la crème”. So, pps, I waited more than 2 months for this post and if I have to wait again, it will be fine with me. I do understand quality writing takes time. I would love to read how they work things out. Thank you very much.
Oh my god!! You can NOT leave it there!! Please continue with this story.
Just popped out to join in the begging comments. Pleeeease… don’t keep us in suspense any longer… And pleeeease, don’t even think of quitting it; it’s too good!! Dana being the drooling one… owww that’s priceless! I wish they had shown us some of this in the show. Fast forward to Julesless si vous plait; she doesn’t hold a candle to Dana…!! Plus, I can see a dark side on her. I don’t buy that social worker stuff… I think she has something up her sleeve… PleeeeasePS, I love it!
argh – i can’t believe you left it there. i hope you keep your promise and post soon. this update was really good. the interaction with harrison and dana was really cute. and you really do a great job of transitioning between scenes. i know you had to set up the run in, but i can’t believe jules just left alice in the bathroom – she couldn’t have ran upstairs and told her she was leaving. excellent story, post soon.
ps. please do not quit this story its to good, im gunna put it out there swissmiss.. i think its the best!! one lol theres heaps of great stories and how i love them all but yours oh man im in love with it ahaha i sound so stupid right now but thats the truth and im sure there are many that agree thats all :)
wow that was quick you totally answered my prayers lol neways wow eleven i was like out of breath when i realised you had posted then i saw how much and i got so excited lol geezus do you know how much i’ve missed this story but you fully made it up with this one and i can only imagine wats gunna happen in that bathroom or mybe i have dirty mind neways them two alone is always great :) very happy to see your back and on a regualr basis right loved it all of it :) great work!!!!
i love this story so much its great and i really hope you post again very soon (tonight maybe?lol) im so glad you decided to keep going with the story and you better not just leave it and stop!i love it so keep writing and posting lots!
Great update, swismiss! 21a implies a 21b coming along soon, right? Please?
I’m not much of a poster, Im usually dedicated to Muted’s danish only on here but about 2 months ago I decided to check around when I really needed a danish fix. I remember reading the last chapter posted and being like “oh shit this was like over a month ago, theres no way shes gonna post again!” yet today I decided to check anywaise and saw that you did, you have no idea how excited I was for some fresh danish and a solution to the last chapter. But I gotta say, your cruel for leaving this on such a cliff hanger. Pleeeeease post again and continue to do so. I depend on fanfic to keep my danish addiction satisfied, and your one of the best by far. I love this story! But especially I love Dana just because shes the hottest, funniest and most adorable character on the show. I love me some good danish in the mornings, so please post the rest in the next week. Im jonesing.
please don’t keep us hanging in here for long. hihihi I’ve been reading your story and I like it very much, just thought I’d leave a comment to let you know, thanks:)