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Freedom Fest Ch. 8
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“I want to take you somewhere. Turn right into the parking lot.”
“Dane, why are we at the park?”
“Just pull into a parking spot over there.” Dana pointed to an area of the parking lot that was empty and away from the guys playing basketball.
When Alice pulled into a parking space and put the mini in park, Dana quickly reached for the keys, turned off the car, and pulled the keys out of the ignition.
“What the…”
“Now you have to talk to me. What happened at Jay’s and don’t tell me nothing because you’re crying.”
Alice knew Dana wasn’t going to let her leave the park without talking so she told Dana everything that happened. She was crying because she felt bad for hurting Jay. He was a nice guy and she didn’t want to hurt him, but she knew she made the right decision. “Can I have my keys back now?” Alice asked holding out her hand after telling Dana everything.
“No.” Dana opened her door and climbed out of the mini. Now Alice was really confused. Dana not only had her keys, but she just got out of the car with them. Alice jumped when Dana opened her door and she was surprised when Dana pulled her out of the car for a hug. “Thank you for telling me.” They stood outside of the car holding each other for a few minutes. As they parted Dana gave Alice a goofy grin. “Now you can have your keys back. Let’s go home.”
“I wasn’t allowed to have my keys because of a hug?” Alice asked puzzled.
“Yup.” Dana grinned.
“You’re crazy.” Alice laughed, happy to lighten the mood.
“For you.” Her comment was out before her brain had a chance to register the words. Dana could feel her cheeks turning red and walked back to the passenger’s side of the mini and got in before Alice could reply. Alice stood in the parking lot in shock. No one had ever done something so innocent and sweet for her before. Dana wasn’t kidding about building the relationship on communication, honesty, and trust. This was something new to Alice and it scared the hell out of her. She wasn’t going to be able to hide her feelings or run from Dana like she did others in the past. What scared Alice the most was that she could already feel the wall that she worked so hard to build around her heart beginning to crack.
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I am thinking pretty much the same as MaGoose. Except, I would go even further to say that A was not acting responsibly. I find it very hard to accept her out right telling D that she was dating other people. WTF? How could she be so callous about it and at the same time telling D that she loved her. At present, I think D was more invested into this relationship than A. That was why D wanted to end her life?What a hopeless romantic! cougar, this is a terrific story, because this situation happens all the time and is sad. I feel for D being all alone reminiscing the yesteryears. Can’t wait for your next post. btw, 2 beautifully written NC-17 scenes from you and MaGoose consecutively is a rare Danish gem these day! Thank you very much!!!
I loved the update even though I think Alice is a bitch to Dana, I don’t think I woukd have put up with what Dana have to, I do how ever hope like everybody else for a happy ending..Loved it keep it up…
What a powerful chapter, cougar! Seriously… You churned up a lot of emotions. I love how this story shows the thoughts and feelings of Dana in both present day and when the events happened. I am glad Alice broke things off with Jay and seems to be opening up with Dana. I was initially very pissed at Alice for the Arkansas Jay thing. But now I am wondering if she is scared of the walls dropping and is trying to keep Dana from getting completely through the walls she has built. It was still a rotten thing to do, though. And I think Dana should either ask for them to be exclusive or maybe date someone else herself so Alice knows what it feels like. Obviously they work out something to be together for five years. You are getting the hang of the NC-17, I see. Very well done. Heh. Thanks so much. I have found myself to be really caught up in this story and I can’t wait to see what happens next.
that was a lot of emotions for one chapter but being an alice and dana story it the only way it should be can’t wait to read the next chapter so pps great update I love it
4 personal reasons al ia m saying…OOHH BOY…but on another note..that was a truly NC-17 story..brings bak memories of one of my past relationships..cant wait till ch. 9
great chapter! im dying to know what happened between them and why wouldn’t alice talk to her. ahh alice wat is she doing? does she realise that shes hurting dana or is she really oblivious to it? Is it okay that she’s sorta cheating with guys i wonder how dana would react if it was a lady alice got with hmmmm im sorry i want to know so badly lol.